Wednesday, October 30, 2019

Paragraph Writing/Editing

First Draft 
The animal sensor is infrared sensing. 
Infrared sensing means you see heat. 
Heat is seen as red, yellow and orange. 
A pit viper uses infrared to track prey. 
Infrared is interesting.  

Second Draft 
The animal sensor I like is infrared sensing. 
 Infrared sensing means you see and detect heat. 
Heat is seen as red, yellow and orange. 
Sneakily, a pit viper uses infrared to track prey. 
Infrared is amazingly interesting. 

Peer Editing 
The animal sensor I adore is infrared sensing. 
 Infrared sensing means you see and detect heat. 
Heat is seen as red, yellow and orange. 
Sneakily, a pit viper uses infrared to track prey. 
Infrared is amazingly interesting. 


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